- Posted by Johanna on September 21, 2008 at 11:12 pm
- Category: Graphic Novel Reviews
- CREDITS: by Von Allan
- PUBLISHER: Self-published; $13.95 US
Von Allan really knows a lot about comics. He writes knowledgeably about the business at his blog, and he’s clearly thought through what he wants to do. Which is write and draw a graphic novel.
Unfortunately, his art is not of professional-level quality. It’s uncomfortable to read, because the characters are off so much they don’t quite look human. There’s no flow between panels, and even when the art is technically correct, it’s the wrong choice because it gives the reader the wrong impression of what’s going on. For example, the first page shows a girl bouncing a ball. The ball is drawn as an oval instead of a circle, which is correct in how it appears to the eye in real life, but it took me much too long to figure out that the ball was really round instead of football-shaped. As a result, I didn’t know what the action was, since the panel sequence only showed the ball and her foot. That’s much too much work for a sequence that’s only meant to set the scene.
See for yourself — the whole book is downloadable as a PDF, so no need to spend any money. The package consists of three interconnected comic stories (for a total of 25 pages, only a quarter of the 88-page book) and an extensive amount of backup material, including concept art and for each story, breakdowns, outlines, and full script. This book would be of much more value if he’d left out the comics and just shown how the process works in developing a story for the medium. He should write instructional books instead of drawing.